So many students took a dark and spooky direction with this week’s prompt, but you found a completely unique pathway. You give us a bold, sassy cake lifter who’s unrepentant for his or her actions. You’ve definitely captured the attitude of a feisty character who’s comfortable breaking rules and doesn’t think ahead to the consequences, which you hint at with “the end of the world” line at the end. You baked a winner this week, Asha. 🙂
Well done on your piece for the hundred word challenge. something that I really liked was that you said I maybe just borrowed a piece of cake. To make your piece a bit better you could have worked on your sentences they are a bit short even though it was like you were talking you still could have talked a bit longer. over all it was great I loved your story
Hi Asha –
So many students took a dark and spooky direction with this week’s prompt, but you found a completely unique pathway. You give us a bold, sassy cake lifter who’s unrepentant for his or her actions. You’ve definitely captured the attitude of a feisty character who’s comfortable breaking rules and doesn’t think ahead to the consequences, which you hint at with “the end of the world” line at the end. You baked a winner this week, Asha. 🙂
Keep on writing with expression!
Mrs. Rombach, Team-100WC
8th Grade English Teacher from Virginia, USA
https://blogs.lcps.org/rombachravenrockstars
Well done on your piece for the hundred word challenge. something that I really liked was that you said I maybe just borrowed a piece of cake. To make your piece a bit better you could have worked on your sentences they are a bit short even though it was like you were talking you still could have talked a bit longer. over all it was great I loved your story
Cheers Jorja