Hi mo, I really like your 100 wc.
I really like how you said “I had just put on my new VR set and I was seized into a new dimension. Everyone in sight was a just a cloud of fog. The roads of this new planet were as narrow as a string of spaghetti.”
and how you said “Elderly and dilapidated houses were crumbling to the oblivious of the ground.”
I also like how you used rhetorical questions.
I really like how you used theorising as well.
Hi Mo,
This was a fabulous read; you did a great job of creating an atmosphere through your careful vocabulary choices and used questions well to draw me in.
Keep on writing, you clearly have a talent for it.
Mrs MooreTeam 100London
Hi mo, I really like your 100 wc.
I really like how you said “I had just put on my new VR set and I was seized into a new dimension. Everyone in sight was a just a cloud of fog. The roads of this new planet were as narrow as a string of spaghetti.”
and how you said “Elderly and dilapidated houses were crumbling to the oblivious of the ground.”
I also like how you used rhetorical questions.
I really like how you used theorising as well.
Thank you Asha for your very kind and generous comment.
Hi Mo,
This was a fabulous read; you did a great job of creating an atmosphere through your careful vocabulary choices and used questions well to draw me in.
Keep on writing, you clearly have a talent for it.
Mrs MooreTeam 100London