Hi Fatima! That is quite a fright to have while out collecting leaves. I like how you used short sentences like “I screamed.” to make the story suspenseful and scary. The last two sentences also pack a punch showing the fear of the main character. I do wonder what was the frightening thing in the castle. Keep writing!
Oh! That must be some castle you visited! well done on building the scary parts in your story.
Hi Fatima! That is quite a fright to have while out collecting leaves. I like how you used short sentences like “I screamed.” to make the story suspenseful and scary. The last two sentences also pack a punch showing the fear of the main character. I do wonder what was the frightening thing in the castle. Keep writing!